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Commenting on blog posts

Remember, we will only approve good quality comments to the blog. Follow these steps when posting a comment.

  • One: Say something positive “I really like how you have tried to use some powerful verbs in your writing. It helps bring it to life.”
  • Two: Ask a question By asking a question, you are encouraging a reply and you are engaging the author. “Your writing makes me think that you may have read some Michael Morpurgo books. Which story inspired you to write this?
  • Three: Suggest an improvement “To make this even better, you could change the way you opened the final sentence. Can you think of an adverb that would work? Leave a comment with some ideas.”

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Take a look at these comments. Which one do you think is an example of a good quality comment? Can you explain why? Can you explain why the other comments aren’t good enough and suggest what could be done differently?

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The Moon Landing.

The Moon Landing

NEIL ARMSTRONG...The Man Who Took The First Step On The Luna,,,,Had His Last Breath...Few Moments Ago Sunciti _ Sundaram’s Images + Messages via Compfight

Today we are finding out about the Moon landings. Use these links to help you with your research. Make sure you write things down because you will be writing a diary entry from the point of view of Neil Armstrong later in the week. Try to imagine what it might have been like for the astronauts taking part on the mission.

Space for Kids website.

Footage from the BBC of Neil Armstrong landing on the Moon.

Video clip of the men who landed on the moon from the BBC.

Another website about the Moon landing.

KP Snacks Project

After several weeks learning about business and practising writing persuasively, we tested our skills by writing to KP Snacks on Tanfield Lea Industrial Estate.  We wrote inviting them in (and requesting some free snacks!)

Our letter must must have been very effective because Gordon, Mick and Emma came in on Monday with huge boxes of tasty snacks to watch our adverts for products we had developed.  Thank you very much to them for their time and energy – we really enjoyed it!

Here are some photos of the morning, plus the winning teams who won a trip to the factory. They were a credit to our school for their attention and exemplary behaviour.